Please read this IELTS Writing Task 2 introduction. What mistake was made here?

Crime is an indispensable part of society. As long as there are rules, there are also people who will break them. Today, the main way of punishing people for their misdeeds is sending them to prison. Prisons exist in every country on Earth and most of them are notoriously overcrowded. How can people be deterred from committing crimes? Some consider stricter sentences to be the preferred way to prevent crimes, while others disagree. In this essay I will discuss both views and explain why I think that criminals are often victims of circumstances and helping them find their way in life would be more effective than threatening them with years behind bars. (112 words)

What would you remove, if anything?

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Here are the mistakes that were made in yesterday’s excerpts from IELTS Writing Task 2 essays 📝

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